侃哥英语范文赏析：政府探索太空有无意义
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大家好，很多同学目前写作能力相对薄弱，但在平时练习的时候力图用长难词汇和复杂句型以期在语言上获得高分，实际上这种做法效果不好，甚至适得其反。为什么呢，因为“语言能力薄弱”和“用好难词长句”本来就是一对矛盾，这些词句已经超过了你的驾驭范围，试问如何能用得正确？更别说用得出彩了。希望大家心态上尽量放平，尽可能用初高中的简单词汇和最基本的语法句型，去论证你的观点、阐明你的理由。其实，真正得分高的同学，就是在“简洁”这个点上取胜的。
Do you agree or disagree the following statement: Space exploration is a waste of money.（2015.10.11托福考试独立写作考题）
论证角度：原因挖掘
观点选择：让步
开头：不同意太空探索是浪费金钱。（话题引入+他人观点+明确立场+过渡）
Space is such an unfathomable existence that drives generations of human beings to tap into its secret. Any substantial country considers space exploration as one of its most important national strategic programs. Thus, an interesting discussion arises among ordinary people about whether this kind of investment is worth it. As far as I am concerned, space exploration is absolutely not a waste of money, and has its incomparable values. My viewpoint is based on the following reasons. (78 words)
tap into：探索
strategic programs：战略项目
be worth it：值得
a waste of money：浪费钱
incomparable values：无与伦比的价值
中间段1：大量重要且广泛运用的科技得益于太空探索。（主题句+说理论证+细节例子）
Firstly, a great many essential and widespread technologies are fruits of space exploration. Space exploration gives human beings a whole new perspective to look at our planet. High above the earth, we are able to observe the changing of clouds as well as formations of earth’s surface, which not only betters our understanding of the earth but also provides great convenience to our life. The invention of GPS is a good case in point. Based on the information coming from satellites, GPS can tell people the exact location of any place they want to go, and figure out the shortest route to reach there. (104 words)
be fruits of：是...的成果
a whole new perspective：全新的视角
better one's understanding of：更好地让某人理解
figure out：生成
中间段2：太空探索展现一个国家的综合实力，提升国际影响力。（主题句+说理论证+细节例子）
Secondly, a country can showcase its comprehensive national power by exploring space, enhancing its international presence. Space exploration is a reflection of a country’s strength in economy and science and technology. A country with cutting-edge technology and abundant capital will have a greater say in international affairs. For example, during cold war, two superpowers--Soviet and the US competed against each other in trying to get the control of the universe. When Russia announced its successful launching of manned space aircraft, the US was reluctant to show weakness and unprecedentedly sent astronauts onto the moon, which greatly enhanced the international influence of the US. (103 words)
international presence：国际影响力
cutting-edge technology：前言科技
have a greater say：拥有更大的话语权
international affairs：国际事务
get the control of：获得...的控制权
be reluctant to show weakness：不甘示弱
中间段3：诚然，太空探索诚然跟老百姓实际生活关系不大，而且确实会占很大的财政预算；很多人会说钱花的不值，但是这只是一种短视的看法。放长远眼光，如果太空技术被几个大国垄断，那无太空探索能力的国家将会丧失优势。（主题句+说理论证+细节例子）
Admittedly, space exploration seemingly has little to do with ordinary people’s livelihood, and it really accounts for quite a share in a country’s fiscal budget. That explains why some would express opposing opinions towards the practice. However, it is just a shortsighted view that space exploration is worthless. Looking into the future, we have reasons to believe that if space technology is monopolized by a few countries, a country without the technology will lose the upper hand in international competition. (80 words)
have little to do：与...无关
accounts for：占据
fiscal budget：财政预算
look into the future：放眼未来
lose the upper hand：丧失主动权
结尾：重申观点+归纳理由/升华主题
To recap, space exploration means a lot to a country. It is not only because the rank and file can be a direct beneficiary of space exploration, but also because the practice to explore the space endows a country with many additional values in international arena. (46 words)
means a lot to：对...意义重大
the rank and file：老百姓
be a beneficiary of：是...的受益者
endow...with...：给...赋予...
additional values：附加值
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